Definitely an insightful piece into the mind of the writer, and I enjoyed that -the different font that let's the reader know what Lizzy is thinking was well executed and a good departure from the cliche, "and then I thought..." In terms of telling a story, one aspect that I did not like was how it seemed as though everything was directly spelled out, leaving very little imagination to the reader, however that I understand that is a personal preference, and I am probably not the intended or target audience for this sort of writing. I want to know what the dream was: is the dream being coached by her hockey heroes? or being rescued by the hockey heroes from abusive foster parents? or both? or just being rescued? I assume it must be a combination of all of them, but I wasn't sure the focal point of the dream, it seemed broad because of the in depth imagery about both the foster parents and the hockey heroes, so by the end, I'm not sure what I should be most happy about, the fact that Lizzy was rescued, or the fact that she met her hockey heroes. Aside from a few grammatical and word usage errors, the piece was well written and well thought, providing insight and entertainment. Great story, keep up the good work.
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