This was a really good idea! I found it a little hauting, but it really made me pause for thought and consider how I would feel in such a situation. My favourite part is the last verse; there is smething that is just so thought provoking about it.
However, I found that in places the words didn't flow of the tongue as well as in other parts, especially in the 2nd verse. Also, I found that the 2nd and 3rd line of the penultimate verse clashed and I had to stop and start a few times to get the two lines to flow together at all.
But all in all, this is a lovely, well written poem.
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