"So Close" made me think of all those lonely nights I spent without my boyfriend. It is a beautiful piece of work and for a minute I almost got lost in your words. Actually, feeling the shivers rundown my spine. This poem has so much description and emotions it is hard not feeling what you felt when writing. Can't wait to hear more from you.
Your story was written well and it kept my interest but I'm guessing the reason why your ratings are low is because people are looking for more than a story that involves a stripper and a redneck. It is kind of cheesy. Don't you think? I will be keeping an out for part three because Summer in the Death Valley has capture my interest. I just hope that the story is going to be a good one.
I think that this was a very creative piece of work. I didn't lose my interest not once and I found myself awaiting for the next surprise. There are those days where you are going to wake up and realize that your life will never be the same and those are the days you write about. The days that give your life new meaning. I look forward to reading more of your work.
I felt like your story started off kind of rough but it got a little smoother as it went on. I could almost picture the stone cottage for a minute there. It had very good detail which never lost my interest. I am looking forward to reading more of your story.
This was a cute little story and very inventive. Who knew that the lost of a tooth could mean so much. This is a grest start to a wonderful story I'm sure so many children would in enjoy. I think it was very creative and interesting. For a minute I could see the tiny tooth falling into the sink. Look forward to reading more about George and his exciting new life.
I knew from the begining of your story that it was going to be a good one. I felt like I was being brought into a whirlwind adventure as I read about Rebecca. For a brief moment, I thought I was actually there with her as she was running into the cold night. It was a very interesting story and I would like to hear more.
I think you did a great job of describing death. I think that sometimes we forget that just like in life, death can be viewed from another perspective.
You truly help me see death from a different perspective. Your poem is interesting and well wrote. I would say a job well done.
I used to adore stories like these when I was a kid. I remember reading those books where you could chose your own ending and of course I would chose the smart way out but I would go back and read the alternatives just because there was always that little question in the back of my mind, "What if . . .". I think that you came up with a very creative idea and alot of people would enjoy reading.
I think you did a good job keeping me interest in the story. It has great suspense and there is nothing like a book that keeps you on the edge of your seat the entire time you are reading. I can't count the times I've spent staying up the entire night trying to finish a good book but a hint of advice from a reader of many mysteries and thrillers. Please don't lead the read on to a dull ending. The ending always the most important part in books like these.
You told this story with great detail. The images overflowed my mind as I read the story. Actually, being able to see the poorly kept grounds in the graveyard. I just thought that the revenge thing has been done so many times but the story was a good one.
It is a lovely song. I was really feeling you when you wrote Maybe I should just let go and let myself cry. I think that is the hardest because it so easy to give up and I was always told cowards chose death. I think it is great that we still have great song writers out there like you when music is at it worst. Hopefully, people like you can help save it.
By the end of your story my eyes were filled with tears. I think you did a great job of giving us insight into the life of John. It seems like bad things always happen to good people. Your are an excellent author in my eyes. It was a tragic event told in such a beautiful story.
I think within your story you gave the word faiytale new meaning. It is unlike anything I have ever read before but that is why I like it. It has all the key elements of a good story. Controversy, love, death, etc. You draw a thin line between reality and fantasy. I am very interested in reading more.
The title alone had me interest. The characters appeared very vivid in my mind as I read. For a minute I could almost seeing Mal smiling at me with those amazing dimples. I would like to read more of One night in Bangkok and understand why it makes the had man humble.
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