I really like this poem, it carries a great momentum and wonderfully constructed. I like the metaphors. This poem expresses the rush of heady romance when all things seem possible and then the sad dilema of unfulfilled need then acceptance that it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all. Love as a gift.
Is this a poem or is this a piece of prose? There doesn't seem to be any poetic structure? Of course, you don't need any structure you can just free-from but I wonder if you are telling a story , trying to find a voice or trying to find someone to listen? Are the spelling errors part of the poem?
I don't know if God is the perfect person because he doesn't answer back!
I hope you don't mind my feed-back but your writing struck me as quite raw and appealing in it's rawness.
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