Hey this is my first review so I hope it's ok!
I really liked your poem, it has a great depth and personal emotion involved. The structure of the poem lets the reader feel alongside the subject of the poem and identify with the prolonged agony the subject is feeling. It also reads really well and is fluent with no good grammar and punctuation.
I especially liked
'as I creep,
slither,
retreat from view.'
the use of subtle rhyme in this instance and throughout gives a soft but bitter undertone to the writing which I really liked.
Hope this was helpful!
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