I love this kind of genre and writing, so I'm really happy I stumbled upon this. This was a very enjoyable read. You are great at moving the story around; it has a good flow to it. Your discriptions of things are great as well.
The only thing I wouod suggest is to make this story longer. I felt like you rushed the ending and left the reader wanting more. Idk maybe there is more, but overall great read!
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