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Review of A Day on the Farm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
"This was a time for crowing." I rather liked that line. I had a good laugh. Overall, this was an entertaining read. I'd look at it a bit more closely where your word choices are involved, as some of them tend to be awkward (mostly in the first paragraphs). An example of said awkwardness would be: "morsels of food that might be crawling about.' That line just didn't work for me in particular.
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Review of Kleptomania  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I wasn't sure how I felt about this at first, but the last line really made it for me. Nice job!
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