Hi! I just wanted to say, first of all, I loved the overall story concept - definitely different! (I'm a huge fan of different lol). I liked how each character didn't already have talents ( like "freak shows" in circuses) but had to learn/ were given talents and things to do.
One thing I noticed was that there were a few places that either needed some punctuation or needed different punctuation. For example, " She follows the smell in the distance a Fairy smiles for it has lured her into a fairy ring". Maybe could use a period after " distance". There were a few spots like that, but honestly other than the few spacing/ pausing issues, this was very well written, and I hope you continue the story so we can find out what happens next with her show! :)
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