This is an awesome idea and I tip my hat to you my friend. I'm loving this game and am playing it with the girl I like right now :D If you come out with any new ideas for games, I'll be keeping my eye on your portfolio.
Holy cow. I really liked this. I especially like the imagery given throughout the whole poem (Wish I could get this stuff while I'm in my AP classes :D lol). Keep it up. Even though you said I was good, I think that you're better. I tip my hat to you and say good job. Also, I don't need the GP's
I like the whole idea of it. Wishing and the possibility of anything to happen. I say that with a lot of work, this could turn into one of those stories that go into the thousands. I think that the only problem is that the characters should be added on as you go. Putting them at the beginning is a little confusing.
Good job. The story line is self descriptive and is easy to grasp the situation. All I think it needs is a few good switches in plot and a theme that really gives a good feeling to the line. I really also liked the whole rules in the story as well. I think that with the extra story parts and a few more chapters, this story can get really good. Once again, good job.
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