THIS IS AMAZING. Sure, I have a few things to follow, but I love it! I love how you sound so...British and cocky. And I mean that in the best way. It has a certain tone that says, You are an ignoramus, I must do something about your unfortunate existence so you no longer trouble me with such informality. And I think it is great.
I would....I would find a person without a tree for Christmas and get them a tree and decorate it for them and say, this is your Christmas present. If it were for a younger child, I would say it is from Santa and his helpers. If it were for someone religious I would say it's from their guardian angel. And if it were just a normal, no affiliation person, I would just put, From a Christmas Spirit. I can't have a real Christmas tree anyway, I am allergic to Pine trees. I would die. Anyway, great prompt. This is a really cool idea and when I read it I thought of my Great Grandma and how she has us put up this huge tree and decorate it before the family get together for Christmas. Good Job. Keep being fantastic.
Simple. Well Put. I was expecting this big thing that I had to search for a deeper meaning, but it turns out, it's a little thing where the meaning is right there in my face and makes me question my existance. AKA, is this about something like paper....or the human life. Good job. Love it.
This is really great. I really like the amount of description you put in, despite it being a more opinion piece. I didn't find any grammical errors and the flow is well developed. I would reconsider calling it an essay, due to the amount of emotion. Otherwise, fantastic. Keep writing.
This is really beautiful. I like how you made all the colors represent some part of life, and how you didn't automatically make black solely about death. Sorry if this review is late coming, I was looking through your stuff and this was the one I clicked first. Good job.
I like the concept, but you really need to spell and grammar check. I caught a few things throughout the story. I would develop the feelings more, but I love the detail. If you end up writing another piece to this, I would love to read it.
Beautiful. But it always is. I like the word languidly. I have never seen that word before. I love learning new words, I have some definitions posted on my bedroom wall. Any way, great job, good flow (hahaha, see what I did there?) and keep being awesome.
This is really nice. Honestly, I would love for you to extend on the woman smelling of peonies. I think there is something there, but I don't know. I really like the maturity thing as well. I am constantly fighting to be seen as an adult in my family and whenever I get told I am being immature, I wonder who gets to decided how one becomes less mature or more mature. Thank you for sharing. Good job.
This is really deep. I honestly had to read it a couple times to really understand it, but now I do and it's really interesting. It makes you think of your mortality. Or it did me at least. I do want to ask if this comes from a personal experience, but if it doesn't, I also wonder what inspired it. Thank you for sharing it. It is really entertaining and thought provoking. Great job.
So I was going through your portfolio, and this was the first thing. And it was not disappointing at all. This is really cool. I have never thought to just write what I am thinking, I am always trying to edit it for others. I really like this. I love the last line. And I would suggest you doing stuff like this more often, you have a gift for imagery. Good job!
I really love this. This sums up how I wish I could feel. I like how you just have a train of thought that is so deep and outspoken. I think my favorite part is the rewind and fast forward lines. They make me think of the fact, it doesn't have to be someone else asking you to do either, you can ask yourself but it never gets you anywhere. Really great job. I really enjoyed this. Keep writing.
I really loved this work! I am forever finding poems about feelings and hurt and pain but others, but this was about innocence. This was so eye opening. The only improvement is one you probably already know and that bugged you while writing this; some of the lines don't go to the same rhythm. But at the same time, it really doesn't matter because I think you're message is the best part. More people should write like this. Good job.
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