I really liked this story. But, it felt a little too drawn out as a whole. All-in-all though it was very well written and had a lovely flow about it. I also really enjoyed the emotion and description you put in your characters. Thanks for posting.
I really like your choice of words and the flow of your story. One thing I did notice though was the fact that your characters were in constant communication. It almost seemed as though I were intruding as strangers shared a moment, instead of sharing the moment with them. But, your characters have potential and I love your choice of subject. Thanks for sharing.
I really like where you're going with this. The plot is very catchy and easy to follow. The only thing I might suggest is that you could make your story a little clearer to the point by taking out some needless words. For example: "happy to see her friend and colleague from Georgetown University." was in the second paragraph and it comes up again a bit later "They were good friends and both taught at Georgetown University in D.C." The reader may get sidelined if there are too many explanations. But, I believe it was well written for the 1000 word limit. Thank you for sharing it with us. :)
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