... I'm f***ing speechless like whoa i definitely was not expecting that plot twist. I was a sad turn but it was still epic. I felt like i was reading the climax of a really good book, because it had me intrigued. Like . . .(0.0) I honestly feel bad for the guy.
However I will definitely take a look at your other works :)
I swear to god that just confused me so I'll try reading it again... ... ...
Okay so the fist thirteen letters of the alphabet (A-M) are zeros and then the rest (N-Z) are ones.
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I'm thinking about the decimal points now.. but I'll still give it a go. Don't be shy to correct me if I'm wrong.
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11.001001000.0111111011.010101000.
1000100001.01101011.000010001.10100110001.
00110011001.10.00101010111.
00000001101.110000.11.100110100.01
"To mishandle joyousness,
bodybuild.
Vegetables foreshadow
jellybean smokestacks:
cloudberries of imperfections.
Efficiently wriggle to rearrange it."
Through these words you are giving readers an insight to your life I assume, because this piece sounds to realistic to be purely fiction.
I do hope that your situation becomes better and than you manage to get out of the box you're trapped in and make a friend or two. I believe that may honestly make a healthy change in your life. As for your domestics and family issues i cannot speak nor offer advice.
I must say this was particularly deep for the age you had been at the time, but the feeling is mutual. Reading this piece gives you a sense of what the author is saying, because to some it's quite relatable.
In the first stanza, "Everything around me makes me dizzy.
I'm spinning in an endless circle of confusion and emotion that I can't even begin to explain." That basically sums up a feeling most likely everyone may know, unfortunately.
I eally do like this piece.
Okay the rhyming scheme in this poem is much much much better than the previous one of yours i have read.
Though from the seventh stanza you may puase and be like, umm did i miss something or did i read that correctly. The way it branche doff from the ladies of LEER onto the bus driver was a bit... i'm not sure how to put it but i don't think you got to interpret your idea 100%.
Great effort but it's a bit hard on visualizations.
the reader may have to read stanzas over to try and maintain or get a grasp on what it is you wrote or trying to say in this composition.
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