I love that you wrote this in 7th grade. This poem is beautiful. For me this piece said two things:
1) The first stanza went deeper than the word. Sadness sometimes feels overused, and we are desensitized to the actual meaning. This part brings back the real emotion to the word.
2) When you release the actual feeling to the emotion, the pain begins to subside.
I really do love this piece. I know I've already said that, but I really do. Thank you for sharing your work. It's beautiful.
It's not always easy for me to review others items, because they are always hoping that it will give them great insight and will help them with their writing. Most of the time that's what it does, but there are always those who aren't so fabulous at reviewing even though they do it alot. Sometimes though, instead of tellin people what they did wrong and how they should fix it isn't exactly best, and since I am deffenitly not the most creative reveiwer sometimes it's best to just say 'Well done.'
So, well done. The simplicity of this peice was inviting and it didn't intimidate me, as the reader. Some times we get so caught up in the moment we don't realize that not only are we making this for ourselves but we are making this for the reader. So with that we ask our selves 'Can the reader understand what I'm saying?' and as the reader we try and put us in the scene that the writer is giving, therefore changing what the meaning really is.
But I'm sure already knew all this, but for me sometimes I have to remind myself, and thats why I tell you...that even though other's have their opinions, that doesn't change the reason why you wrote this.
Again, very well done. No mistakes, great grammar. I liked the format, SO Write On!
I knew it was going to happen like that! I love these kinds of stories, they give peace in a way, knowing that there's always some sort of an agel with you. I believe her if she really thought this happened, It has happened to one of my friends, but i wont bore you with that story. I like the way you have formatted this, and there are NO puntcuation or capatalization mistakes. Perfect!
I love this piece. I enjoyed reading it, and I hope you have more to come that are just as good, and even better! I also found it a sad poem since there were three others who had lost their life. Looking to god though was very inspiring. I hope you have a FABULOUS day!
Wow. This was amazing! It was funny, and very dramatic for a librians case. I never knew that that sort of thing happened Anyway, I didnt really understand what this was a bout at first but then, when I realaized what you were doing with the whole cameras and fading in and out it was pretty neat. I'm no expert or professional, but I really think you did great, Justin is quite a character. He's also my favorite. I also detect a moral, but i'm not quite certain mine is as acurate as your or if you really planned on one, but I really do love this, I think its a great episode, and if you have more I would diffenetly like to read them......hope you enjoyed writing this, as much as I enjoyed reading it.......
O.M.G, I totally feel so sad for Halley, and I am SO glad that Halley stood up for Bianca because that would have been so sad if Joshua had lade one hand on her.
I feel SO bad Halley, I mean a life like that, I would have left the moment I spent one night in the same house with him, and her mother....seriously, that is just sad.
What my question is is What compelled you to write this? I mean I think you did beautifully on it, but how did it come to you?
I guesse that some poeple would die if they couldn't write. I guesse that I would die without writing. I am a big fan on writing about death. Although I don't do as much anymore. Anyways I think you know what your talking about in this static item.
I'm not Particular with a death of a spouse, but if it is I guesse that it must have been hard.Question though... was this your wife or someone? just curious.
I am particular with deaths though,...very sad things.
Nothing anybody likes.But it is a part of life.
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Anyway, I didnt really understand what this was a bout at first but then, when I realaized what you were doing with the whole cameras and fading in and out it was pretty neat. I'm no expert or professional, but I really think you did great, Justin is quite a character. He's also my favorite. I also detect a moral, but i'm not quite certain mine is as acurate as your or if you really planned on one, but I really do love this, I think its a great episode, and if you have more I would diffenetly like to read them......hope you enjoyed writing this, as much as I enjoyed reading it.......