hey ok first AWESOME job. i totally got into the flow and you kept it all the way through. just had a few suggestions:
"of" might sound better "off" on the meds line
it would maybe flow better if you took out the "with that black coal" part
and i think you can get your point across instead of saying s*** maybe "things" or something along those lines... and i only say that because you pulled off the rest of that rap without cussing... and parents would feel better with a cussless christian rap and it uplifts rap when you can do it without cussing.
But really really good job! I was very impressed
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