I LOVE THIS POEM SO MUCH! I love how this poem flows and love the way it rhymes. It held my attention the entire way through. This was great and I am in love with the line "Perhaps a thief perfecting his creep" your rhyming is perfect and I love the way that this poem was simple but sparked emotion.
I really like this poem, I'm not really sure if i understand it correctly, but I think i get it enough. I like how it tells about the boys past it really made me connect with the emotion that was flowing through this poem. At first I thought the girl on the couch was the mother but I realized that was wrong by the eighth sentence. I like how you went from one thing to the next within two sentences and it sounded good.
I like the idea of this poem, I don't think that it flows as well as it could. It seems like lists take up your entire poem, but I am in love with the last part
"He just made Heaven
a better place,
for when the day comes
and he takes us,
Home." I think adding on to this and making the poem a little longer would make it an even better than it already is.
I LOVE this poem. I think it is also extremely cool how you got your inspiration for a movie, but it wasn't extremely similar to where i thought to myself "hey this is beauty and the beast." I love your style of writing in this, it really sparked an emotion. Also, my favorite line was "But with a heart of an Angel, she has a cascade of selfless affection."
Wow, I am absolutely in love with this extremely well written poem. I love the thought and emotion that was put into this. I felt the pain that the writer was portraying and now I have chills. This poem is also extremely relatable because everyone goes through stuff similar to this. I also in love with the line "It gave you love when you proved impossible to love" it is so deep and makes me speechless.
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