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Rated: E | (3.5)
I appreciate the difficulty of including concrete information in verse form. Nice job.

The flow is good. Rhyme and rhythm consistent.

The nostalgic element is gripping.

Should the third line of the last stanza read 'When we love what we do'?

I think the last verse is a bit unrealistic and does not conclude the piece well.


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