nice story poem, a lot of work in this.
not much to say on this one.
but that you expressed your self well
as you probly always do.
I really must get back into writting.
But it is hard to get my mind off things.
but reading sometimes helps.
so I thank you for letting me read this.
some nice words you put together here and made it a lovely read. some parts are better then others and i would like to quote them but, no doubt someone else has already. and i thank you for the weaving of these words and for sharing them with us all here as well.
Perfetion never got better as this states. When we see our mistakes and except them. I enjoyed every mimute from it. thought provoking write. To say the least. A lovely free fall verse you have penned here. And please do keep writing. thank you for letting me taste of these your words here today.
kind of makes me think that there's there's more to come. you summed it up well in this write.
delicately spoken too. good show, carry on with your words. and you write of it so nicely too. thank you for sharing with me and all your friends here. May they live ever after as a peaceful love sng.
'If your own mother can’t love you there is no hope
My life feels like a mess in some twisted soap
I love you mum and I will always do so
But I feel that it is time to let go
Of something that is so precious to me
But something, im afraid that will never be'
quoting you;'When you realize you're not as smart as you think you are'.
Then maybe you are smarter then you think you are. also some nice prases in this write as well. And do keep writing and I will perhaps read you again some day soon. thank you for the read today.
Sometimes it is good to stay silent. We sometimes are the receiver of great lasting things. You said so much to me here in this early bird write. Cause it's still early here. just be you and everything will take care of it self in it's own time. thats just a little of what this says to me. Thank you for the read today,
This is cute. Ever notice how the old nursery rhymes had a certain flow to them. kind of like the wind on the leaves singing a soft tune through the grasses in springtime. Kind of bringing fairy-tales and make believe to life again. Even when we thought they were over when we grew up. Takes me back to my child hood. thanks for the walk down memory lane. Thank you again.
Oh does this bring back memories so sweet. Oh to be young for yet another day, hey we still can be if only in our dreams. Which in most cases is the fun of it all. And it's part of what captures and keeps those memories fresh as a spring kiss in our minds. Thank you for the read today.
good ending we should always be happy that we are we. You did a nice write in flow and scruture. maybe almost like a free fall verse in away. And by all means do keep writing and I will maybe read you again soon if time permits. Thank you for the read today.
Lovely words toa friend or friends. love is always thekey to any relationship.and you wrote of itso wonderfully as well. lots of softness within your words. I think we need more soft gentle poets, cause some are just to high up there, and their words are harsh and hurt.but yours is of kindness. thank you for that.
Oh when we add Jesus into our life and poems things only become more beautiful. Forin sorrow the heart is made better,and joy cometh in the morning.you spoke of it so wonderfully. thank you for the lovely reminder of these blessing we have from him. as always, will try to read more real soon.
Yes; thank God there isalways hope of a better and brighter tomorrow. and we should never give up no matter what even when we think we have failed perhaps we haven't.Just take another step and we may seea whole new world. anyways thats where your poem took me this time. thank you for the read.
this is so sad, no one should have to take any kind of abuse. But the poem you wrote so well on the subject. Maybe it was just your thoughts on the sader side of life, I hope so. lots of emotions and discription. And thank you for the read and I will try to real some more real soon.
Sounds like a love story with a slight kiss from heaven and his angels. nice rhythm and flow in places. some places so, so. but nicely done and lots of emotions and imagery is nice as well. and thank you for the read today and I will try to read some more real soon as always.
Yes; the Lords ways are amazing in and never ends even as we get ready to leave this earthly place we shall be greeeted with more amazement then can be discribed as one of the Aposals said in the seventh heavens words that he couldn't speak, well that says there shall be wonders we can not imagin. thank you for the refreshing read.
More like a story poem but it was done so nicely and when ever God is spoke of it just makes it even better. We should sing more praises to him and write more of him, after all wecan never get enough of a good thing. I think it's our sin that kills usnotGod, but thats what I think. And the write was good. Thank you for the read today. andI will try to real more real soon. as always.
This has alot of work put into it, has some nice rhythm and flow in most places. which to me makes the poem a poem. And expressions are discribed so well. feelings and awearness wrote of so nicely. Thank you for the read today. and I will try to read more real soon. as always.
We as humans I think hid alot away. But when the friendship is true as it sounds like it was on your part, we do put up with so much more then what some would. Life is a hard road, you wrote nicely of it. There is one word I think you could of picked a much better word for( in your next to last line).Sometimes words do make the difference in the poem. Thank you for the read today.
Good flow in places other places so, so. Poetry is so appealing to me. It has a magic way about it, and rhythm and flow just adds that special touch. To me sgakespear was lacking that. yet in other area's was a good writer. But I like rhythm and flow. thank you for the read today.
It has nice rhythm and rhyme to it. It was nicely persented. Good writes move the reader and draws them into the writers words. More emotions is a great way to go along with rhythm and flow. Keep up the writting. and thank you for the read tonight. I shall try to go read some more now.
I liked it. It has great meaning and good show of sonnet understanding. You do have talet and it shows. Shakespear was the sonnet writter, so it is hard to top him in my book. But with work you'll get there too. Thank you for the read tonight and I shall try and read some more real soon.
I really liked the first and last lines. They were very catchy.I do like sonnets. and you wrote this really nice. with imagery and all. I will have to give you a 4. thank you for the read tonight and keep writting. and i will try reading some more real soon.
Yes, I have learned alot by your writes. And I have told a number of others already about this site. Mostly my family, which some of themare good writters. I have no idea if they have signed up here or not yet. I also post at 3 other poetry sites but under a different name. And some there has asked and I sent them here and that was the last I heardof them. maybe they are here already. Anyways great ideas.
I liked it. The idea of dreams I liked as well. Takes us to heaven and can bring us down just as fast. Hope it keeps you in the clouds if it makes for a lovely time. You did a nice job expressing your self. keep writting. and thank you for the read today.
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