I thought this was a good poem, much better than the 3 star rating you received. I'm not sure if this is a poem, but it read like one...I put your write in a poem form....it's just a suggestion...disreguard this note if you dislike my thoughts....No matter, I loved reading it.
The ugly is what made me today.
I pray every day for God to let me find a way out of this maze.
No regrets, because the light has come today for me to face the truth.
No way will I settle for a truce, almost smart enough to outsmart my foolishness.
Only one way to heal my wounds is to face the bulls***!
Hiding behind the curtains and pretending like I am not hurting for so long.
My real self has been so wronged, buried behind years of pretend smiles, while my façade plays like a love song.
Great for the ears, but only my eyes’ know that it is a broken record struggling to stay intact.
So complicated but so simple, so real but so deceiving.
Seeing isn’t always so believing.
Listen to my heart beat, but nobody will know until I am ready to face my troubles.
I thought it was honest, real, and it had your heart all over it. Also I feel you put a lot of hard work into this write. I didn't know your friend, but in a very small way I do now. Very good, and thanks for sharing!....P.S. Even if I did not know this was about a close friend of yours, I would of still given you a 5.0 rating, it's that good as far as I am concerned.
Every now and again I run into a poem just like this one, brilliant! I loved it, every word was perfectly in place. A very nice flow and rythem. So well done, it's just a real pleasure to read. I love poetry, and poems like this are the very reason I search this site for good writes. Thanks for sharing!
Woo! I started to sweat just reading this. I really like the work you put into this orginal write. It's spicy, and classy all at the same time. It's a very smooth read with just a hint of naughty. Love it! So glad you decited to share your work. It's a A+
Although I found it to be a bit difficult to read through all of the slang...I loved it! It's a beautiful original idea and a very well written work of art. Thanks for sharing! Primarily I like to read poetry, but this was a joy to review and comment on. Thanks kindly for sharing. Hope you stop by my place again for a read. Take care and Merry Holidays!
Very nice April. This might be my favorite of yours yet. You really put a lot of hard work into this well written gem of a poem. Nice flow without over kill. This one just brings you right in and holds you to the very end. Bravo! I'll be taking another gander from time to time. I'm at work tonight and it's been slow, but glad I was able to stop by for a sneak peek. Yap at you later.
I'm not real sure what this is, a poem? a write? No matter I like it. I have a few writes of my own that no one seems to know what they are, so I understand. Thanks for sharing, it's a fun read!
I'm not sure I really know how to review a poem, but I know what I like. I love this poem. I love poems that do not rhyme and still have a ring and flow. Thanks for sharing.
Love is a wonderful thing eh? When I write poems like that to my GF, she just floats. I think poems that use emotion are my favs, that and the short and sweet ones. This poem is lovely and dear to your heart, I hope dear to your husbands too. Thanks for sharing your write!
It's a nice poem and also a nice photograph of your son. I think most or all of America wants to see our troops come home. I of course can only imagine how a child would feel. Thanks for serving this fine country, but we are ready to see our men and women come home. Bless you all...P.S. I loved this write!
This piece of art allows the reader to see past the writers soul. In one poem I wrote "My poems are my emotions at the end of a pen" You've done that here with your art work. It's a classic beautiful expression of talent. I really enjoyed it April, I read it several times over just so I could get the real feel of this wonderful write. Thanks for suggesting this poem to me.
"Sickened, I turned away gasping and tried
To regain my breath, although I just cried
"I'm fine," I told them, although I just lied
And that, my dear friend, was the day that I died"
This ending tied it all together for me. I loved your poem, and hope to stop in again sometime when I'm not so tired. Thanks for sharing your work..I will return.
I stopped by to read your "Bio"...I didn't find one, but I did find this wonderful write. Thank you for sharing. It's a delightful read, and a wonderful poem. I hope to stop in again sometime...thanks again!
This poem is a gem, I loved it. It is a easy read with depth. " like a tattered spire I'm barely worth the fight" is the meat of the poem...I read this poem several times and enjoyed every word...thank you for sharing.
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