I really enjoyed this short story! I love the short examination of a man who finally faces the consequences of his "shady" business. This is a very extreme case of a protective father figure, and an interesting look into the lengths a man would go to protect his daughter. I think a follow-up where Jim has to face the consequences of his extreme actions (the cleanup) would be very interesting and entertaining.
I liked how you connected the ending to the very beginning, in the scene where he's tailing a mundane cheater to contrast the exciting/extreme story of the biker.
Thank you for posting,
Joleigh
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