I want to read more dammit. This Armando has a great sense of humor! This writing had some depth, more from some other mob storied I have read, so keep it up.
Wow, loved this. Making something (to me) a rather boring subject interesting. And the dialogue was spot on. Especially when Ms Avery asks if she can ask a question and Mr Johnston says " if you make it quick" ahh, yes I have heard that before: wanting it quick shows her opinion doesn't matter. And the corporate lingo NVP ROI, cosolidate, senior analyst etc, leaves me very dry thirsty for some juice.
Good one.
This is a good start. A very secretive fantasy feel. I liked the description of the " shadows cast by the dim streetlamps to stay out of anyone's veiw" this is very evocative of a dark night and created tension by demonstrating to me that you would need anonymity. Keep up the good work.
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