Good poetry hun, i loved it and it made me feel and understand how special relationships are, how we need to keep in touch with out loved ones and how painful breaking up with our loved ones are :)
Hope to read more from you, keep up the good work and Write On!
Wow, such a touching but amazing story. I loved every inch of it, especially the ending.
Congratulations with the Prologue, not many people start a story with a Prologue because some of them forget to, whiles others don't know how to.
The story made me really scared because i was alone in the house but suddenly i heard a voice which made me jump, and when i turned, it was my mum coming back home. :) Such stories are what most readers look for, stories that scare the hell out of them.
The little advice i can give you is to try and make your stories as long as possible because i felt there were some parts that could have been added to make it much more scary.
All in all, i really loved it and am going to give you a Thumbs Up for a job well done.
Looking forward to reading more from you :)
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