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Review of Caterpillars  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Brilliant stuff! Loved the narrative voice, because of the wit in it (the scent of a butt whooping wafting behind him, what came out of me was neither of those questions). The twist at the end could be better though, unless it's real. Him shooting you and feeling sorry for it. Great writing. Keep it up please.
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Review of 'Droid Void  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Extremely interesting. Loved the title. Also loved the very believable perspective of the robot. The "why didn't you make me an eagle', doesn't seem to connect to seeing, I re-read it twice. But they were ok. Would have been great if we had more of it to savour of course. All in all: Beautiful. Fresh. Believable, if not for the 'why didn't you make me like that or like this.' Maybe you need a bridge that shows you how much he would enjoy seeing, hearing , etc. Anyway, good stuff!
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Review of It Was Decided  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Original and amusing. I loved the bit about him not wanting a purple hoppity hop. Superb. I don't know if you should say "we both have the same things under our shirts". If you think a kid would say it, keep it. Wonderful all in all. Refreshingly true to the characters.
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Review of Warm Peach Pie  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Beautiful and interesting. Keep more of them coming! :) loved it. Well built on Samantha's character. Frank's lacked a tad of depth, just for improvement. God bless.
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Review of My Senior Moments  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Interestingly written, please do write a bit longer if possible
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Review of Crazy Girl  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
You're really talented at letting the reader become the character. Beautiful. If I may ask, how much of this is personal experience?
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