D Kelley's (artesia_man) Reviews

D Kelley

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7 Public Reviews Given

30 Total Reviews Given

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#2299329

Review of ~*~Are you afraid of Friday the 13th?~*~

Review by D Kelley

Rated: ASR

| (5.0)

I just read my second piece of your work. I have now gained an insight to Catwoman and Writing.com. You have a fantastic family. I have no idea who started this site, But it is the best I have found. I find that when I review I also gain in my ability to write. I have learned that reviewing is the best way to improve your on writing. Thank You and your family for a place I can grow my abilities.

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#2299241

Review of birdies in the sky...

Review by D Kelley

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I wish I did not have to rate this to review it. I am very new at writing and have little understanding of all the different types of poetry and other forms of writing. I would like to understand. This seems to be just ramblings of the mind?

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#2297315

Review of Perpetual Emotion

Review by D Kelley

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

I believe you have written a very good poem. I had a little trouble with the first two lines, but after that it flowed. Like all good poems it told a short story that you could understand in each line. As for the first two lines! GREAT Poems are written from the heart. How can you change what is. There must be nothing wrong with those lines. It has to be Me!

Good work
Write On

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#2290694

Review of Dancing On The Moon

Review by D Kelley

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I am no poet and have no expertise of poetry writing. All I know is what I like and if it rings to me. You have written a very nice poem. It was on a nice subject. Oh, almost all poems are of love and feelings. You did a very nice job. It started off a little slow, but was very good at the end. I had the most truble with the word pence and the line it accompanied. But very nice anyway.

Good job
Write on and good luck

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#2290590

Review of Chapter 3

Review by D Kelley

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Your text was very well written. You had something of interest happening at all time. This kept me reading none stop to the end. I do think there are a few places where you can reword some things and make it read a little easier. Some of the text was kind a, how can I say it.. Flat or plain. Kind a dull to read when you take each sentence by them selves. If you haven’t published anything yet, I know you will if you keep writing.

Good job
Write on and good luck

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#2242598

Review of Foolish Miracles (re-written)

Review by D Kelley

Rated: E

| (4.5)

I am giving you a good review not because you told a story about hardships and God but, I beleave you told it from the heart.

Every thing in line and the story rolled on to the end. Or was it the end?

What kind of storys do you normaly tell?
Would like to see if you put your heart into your other work.

Sory about the 4.5 only God is perfect. We still need work.