This was really cool and something that we should all take to heart. You really had my interest piqued and I had to keep reading. One thing that I really loved was the detachment from the issue. The writer's words are lacking in emotion, simply a log of the day's events, and cold to what would have had to be an insane shock to the mind. This definitely gets us thinking! Thank you!
Nice poem. It didn't go anywhere I thought it would, and I like that!!!
The questions are good and reflects the frantic thoughts in the speakers mind that related to that sadness. I think the last line might have more punch if you left out "I just lost my love." Keep the mystery going. I really did like it!
The title is intriguing, but maybe "What's that Sound?" Would have been a bit more capturing of attention. The concept is good, though the story started a little on the slow side. I would like to have seen the characters foiled more and a bit more description of the sound and the fire. The burned diploma and so forth was mentioned and then dropped. I never saw the connection. I did get a bit more into it mid-way through and thought the protagonist's injuries to be funny, though again, maybe a little back story to explain the "I need medical attention--again." would have helped. I must admit that it was quite a letdown when he moved and it started up again, though obviously you wanted the reader to see that it was him, not the apartment creating the buzz. Thanks for sharing!
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