Well done, I loved it!
I assume you dedicated this to your lover who is also your friend.
Your words portrayed life's long path with it's ups and downs. With it's joys and sadness, but forever in love with it's passion and emotion.
They say that a woman is elegant if her hairdo is ok.
Your poem is funny , I enjoyed reading it.
I guess most women fuss over their hair, I must be a small per cent of the woman who do their hair in 5 minutes. My mother always says I take an hour in the bath to shower and 5 minutes to rush and do my hair.
I just haven't got the patience!
Too much hair is a problem for women especially in summer, but luckily they've invented a lot of products to help out.
There's an Italian saying which says, ' One must suffer to appear beautiful'! LOL
I enjoyed reading this poem very much.
It was sad and very emotional. Your words portrayed your young innocence and then your difficulty in growing up.
The form could be improved, perhaps the lines could be shorter and divided into verses. It's a free style form I guess so if you preer it this way it's ok.
Just a suggestion.
The only typo I noticed was towards the end , you wrote innocense' instead of 'innocence'.
Your recurring to white and talking about the opposite touched me. I'm sorry you had to face such a hard time-
I now understand what you mean about not understanding
my piece on 'My Father'.
I thought this was a very significant piece.
Well written and emotional.
I think that true love should be like you described it in this flash fiction story.
Nowadays it's a miracle for a marriage to last 50 years! And to be still so much in love is unique.
Actually I can say that my parents were in love for so long. They have always been an example for me of what a lasting relationship should be.
Is that why I'm still searching for my Prince Charming? It culd be!
I enjoyed readin your piece on Venice. Especially as I was born and live in Venice. I love Venice with all my heart, even if from the age of 3 till 23 I lived in London and went to school there as my parents were working there.
Your description was very detailed and I can tell you've been doing your research well on Venice, tradition and culture.
The only suggestion I have, is perhaps when you talk about a movie star or the name of a film to illustrate it better and not just carry on writing in the sentence. The same with particular ways of saying in Italian e.g ''Acqua Alta''.
Apart from that I fell you used imagination and did a good job of it.
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