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Review of Rapunzel  Open in new Window.
Review by IceWitch Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Great job!
I love all the humor, especially "the elf in a speedo" (see, I'm not mentioning him without premission, i"m quoting things about him, so my $ 1.95 in life savings are safe).
You have done a great job, writing humor is hard.
I have a couple of questions about your use of words:
1) "age updated photo" - maybe you could use some other word except updated, it just doesn't flow.
2) "Looking quiet scared" I think quiet means silent, not what you meant.
3) "exsplained story" I think you should say "told her story" or "exsplained about herself.
And I'm prety shure that rapunzel is not a fruit, it's a type of herb.
Othervise a totaly great and funny short story.
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Review of The Fun House  Open in new Window.
Review by IceWitch Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So, did he drag you of to Hell? (Joke!) A great story, it had me quaking in my flip-flops. I would like to find something wrong with it, but unfortunately I can't. Although the haunted fun house is quite cliche, you managed to make it new and interesting. I thought at first it would be like another Scooby-Doo rerun, but you made it your own. You revealed just enough backround to make sence of the story, but you kept plenty of things close to the vest to make it exitng. Great job, write again.
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