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Review of The secret  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have read your poem "The Secret", and I will give you a review. I am not a review professional, however, I can provide you with feedback on how your poetry impacted me.

I have a few suggestions on how to make your poem sound better. I hope my suggestions will be of benefit to you.

When I think about you,
It reminds me of the elusive verses;
love letters drafted yet never sent,
dwells in the corners of my heart.

Engraved deep inside my soul
beheld an ethereal secret
which I shall remember to bear
with me until my final breath.

Perhaps I loved you more, just to
let you go, I yearned for your
essence in another, yet knowing
he would never be you.

-Vaishnavi


I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Getting your thoughts out in the open is good therapy. Don't give up.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good thoughts, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I read your story of inspiration "Fake It Till You Make It"., and I will do my best to give you a review. I am not a review professional, however, I can provide you with feedback on how your story made an impression on me.

The part of your story that interested me is as follows:

I just sat up and let my legs hang off the side of the bed for a minute while my body got acquainted with this unusually welcomed morning. I desired coffee, mixed with some vanilla a little in. I look forward to what the day is going to bring me. Who will I meet, can I remain genuine and confident within myself? I will challenge myself to take it slow today, to experience the day and its moments as they come, without making judgments and creating unfair expectations from lines that lead to negative feelings about myself or others. I will practice patience in the face of frustration and anger. I will solve problems with kindness and common sense.

I will allow opportunities to rise to take hold of me and carry me toward great things. I am eager to learn new things no matter how the delivery of the lesson is received. I will analyze and recover as much information as I can to help my character grow into a loving and intelligent vessel. Today I choose to be a small light in a dark room.

It was inspiring to me since I take the medication, Wellbutrin, myself. I take Aripiprazole (the generic version of Abilify) along with it. They work well together. They were like miracle drugs to me. My life changed for the better when I got on them.

I encourage you to keep on writing. Writing is good therapy and you write very well.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I finished reading your poetry "The Old Morality Was Still Hanging Aroun". I will gladly give you a review of how your poetry made me feel after reading your poem. I am not a review professional, however, I'll do my best to give you my point of view and how it has impacted me.

My first reaction when I saw the part about having a degree in Business Administration, I was thinking you were talking about me. I have an Associate of Applied Science Degree in Business Management and a Business Administration Certificate. There is a bit of humor there. I worked hard for these honors. I had to take one class at a time for five years for the degree and another year for the certificate. I was asked if I would like to walk at the graduation ceremony or not: I replied, "Of course, I'll walk with the graduates, I didn't work this hard for nothing". On the humorous side of things, I would go to the counselor's office in tears because I was doubtful; I was certain I wouldn't be able to pass the test I was going to take, only to tell the counselor the next day that I made it; I did pass the test.

I want to encourage you to keep up with your writing. It's enjoyable to read your material.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Death Unexpected  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I read your writing "Death Unexpected". I will give you a review of how your story had on me. I am not a review professional, however, I will gladly provide feedback on how I felt after reading your story.

I enjoyed the mystery shows "Columbo", Murder She Wrote, The Nancy Drew Mysteries, "Get Smart" and so forth. My preference is to read a good mystery or murder story rather than having to watch it on television or at a movie theater. The reason is I don't like to see bloody murder scenes and gory details. They end up leaving me with a scary feeling inside. My stomach ends up being queasy and in knots. I don't care for this kind of sensation in my stomach. It puts me on edge.

I look forward to picking up "Death Unexpected"; it sounds like a good book.

I had an unexpected experience when a special boyfriend of mine passed away in front of me. He was excited about serving me a sandwich he made. He opened the refrigerator, looked at me, stepped back a bit, and said, "I can't breathe", and just like that, he died. I was so shocked that I froze up; I wouldn't say anything to anybody.

I want to encourage you to keep up with your writing. You would be a natural at writing a great mystery.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I have read your fantasy story "Crown of Thornes (Intro)", and excitedly, I will do a review for you. I am not a review professional, but I do my best. I give feedback on how I felt after reading your story.

I am impressed with your story. I enjoyed reading it. Your words flowed well. I didn't see any mistakes. You have a way with words. People can easily get into your story by eagerly wanting to read the next chapter.

I look forward to reading more of your story. I don't understand fantasy too well, but my interest was piqued. I watched the original versions of "Star Trek" and "Star Trek, The Next Generation". I can go back as far as watching "My Favorite Martian" and "Lost in Space". I enjoyed watching these shows as well.

I have had fantasies of wanting to go to space, but I wouldn't want to try it in real life since I am afraid of heights and the speed it takes to travel there. It's nice to dream about it though.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I'm sure teenagers would enjoy your story. You've done a great job presenting it.

I hope you will have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I read your monologue comedy version of "Angelina Ballerina" and am excited to give you a review. I am not a review professional, but I will do my best to provide feedback on how much it impacted me after reading your story; it piqued my curiosity and intrigue.

No, I haven't read the books or seen the movies about "Angeline Ballerina". Sounds like it's a good comedy. What do you enjoy most about the classic version? What parts, if any, did you like about the updated version? I know you mentioned liking the clothes she wore in the classic version. It would be interesting to learn more about her character. And, I would like to hear more about William's character. You said everyone had a crush on him. He must have had a time of it chasing all the girls away.

I look forward to hearing more about the characters in this monologue. If you have the time to share more, please do.

It's fascinating to go back to the past when things were a lot different; no phones, no television, different styles of clothing, and different hairdos. Comparing those times to modern times can be shocking to some of us, who consider us old-timers. I don't know if you would consider me as a 67-year-old to be an old-timer. They refer to the music of our age as the Golden Oldies. In the newer generation's minds, our music is outdated. I still enjoy the music of the 40's, 50's, 60's, 70's, etc. Current music that's been changed from the older version ruins the song, then, there have been those who have improved the older version.

Times have changed a lot since my generation. I called it the Feel Good Music era. Today it seems to all be about sex and violence.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last the rest of your life. Everyone deserves to have this.

I encourage you to keep up on your writing. I can use a good comedy.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of In A Pickle  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I finished reading your story "In a Pickle" and it warmed and touched my heart. I am doing a review for you. I am not a review professional, but I am happy to give you feedback on how your story touched me.

Animals are special. Mia, I could tell, is very special to you. An animal is like having a child; they are part of your family. You love them with all your heart. Even though I didn't have any kids, I still get the same feeling with animals. The song "Peaceful Easy Feeling" by the Eagles reminds me of a peaceful time when I had animals. They gave me joy. When I needed it, animals gave me comfort; I felt at peace. I could talk to them and felt understood. I could understand them also. This was when I struggled with some hardships; things I was afraid to talk to anybody about. Things that made me have bad nightmares after seeing a horror movie. I could cry tears of sadness, but the animals made me feel safe; they wiped my tears away, making me less fearful. They understood why I was afraid. At the time, this was something you didn't talk about. I can feel the emotions you felt running through you when you couldn't find your cat. When I couldn't find my special animal, I was frantic. I didn't want to lose my best friend. Horses were my best friend. They are strong, gentle, loving, and the best confidant you could ever ask for. Your secrets are safe with them.

I was excited when Mia jumped into your arms. You had your beloved cat back. I can only imagine the relief you felt. I can see a big smile on your face. Joy and contentment filled your life again; restoration of gladness was indescribable.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. Your story was inspirational. The bond between you was inseparable. Mia understood when you told her you couldn't go any further on the tree because it would have broken if you did. It thrills me to no end how your story ended.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I read your poem "The Girl with the Broken Smile", and will happily do a review for you. I am not a review professional, but I will do my best to give you feedback on how your poem left me feeling.

It's so true. I can relate to this on a personal basis. The emotions I felt during the struggles I've been through were overwhelming. I can sympathize with you for not wanting to smile. I understand completely. I used to smile quite a bit, but it's hard when I see people shouting and screaming on the streets. It makes me afraid to say anything. This is why I don't smile much anymore. I've been told I take things too seriously. I try to ignore this, but it's the truth. I don't mean to be this way, but, there are a lot of angry people in the world we live in. There's too much fighting going on with words and with violence.

I hope my smile will come back. I'm sure it will in time. It's brave of me when I go out to eat and see things happen that I don't understand. Writing keeps me feeling positive. Even when I go through hard times, writing helps me deal with things better when I can help other people cope. This makes me feel better.

I encourage you to keep on writing. I am mighty proud of you for taking the first step in sharing your feelings with the public. This is a huge accomplishment. It takes courage to do something like this. I am looking forward to reading more of your stories. You are doing a great job! When the timing is right for you, you will share your stories so people can hear what you're going through. I have faith in you. Your story helped and inspired me and it will inspire others too. Don't be afraid to reveal your name. It took a long time to do this myself, but I did it!

I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I have read your inspirational story "A Strange Place for Hope", and am ready to give you a review of how your story made me feel. I am not a review professional, but I can give you my best shot.

Yes. A cemetery is a strange place to go for inspiration. Everyone would think it's crazy to go to a place to get hope.

I visit both of my brothers, dad's, and mother's graves whenever I can. Usually, I am there with my sister and brother-in-law. The last two times I had my special boyfriend with us. My sister doesn't like my boyfriend. It seemed rather odd when we were there on Memorial Day of 2024. She acted very strangely. It was a short visit.

I go there to reflect on the happy times I shared with my mom and dad. My brother was retarded (they call it being developmentally disabled now), and the other one was eighteen months old when he passed away. I wasn't born yet. My sister is the oldest, the oldest brother was two years younger than her, and my other brother was two years younger than him, and I was the youngest (or baby) of the family. I talk to them about how things are now in the world and what they would think about what is happening with the world today. They never would've believed it. My dad was 36 years old and my mom was 18 years old when they were married. My dad was 56 years old and my mom was 39 years old when I was born. My sister was 18 when I was born. I was born the year after she graduated from high school.

It seems like I can feel their presence when I visit their graves. I believe my parents would've been disappointed in how badly my sister's behavior is towards me. I don't think she cared for any of my friends or boyfriends I've hung around with. It has been a long time now since they all passed. I miss them terribly, but I have good memories to fall back on with them. This is what gives me hope and inspiration.

I encourage you to keep on with your writing. I look forward to hearing more of your stories.

I hope you have many blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness during your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I have read your family prose "The Moments I Hold Dearest", and giving you a review would be an honor. I am not a review professional, however, I will do my best with my feedback on how your family prose made me feel.

It's hard to tell yourself that you are proud of being you. Some think that we only think about ourselves and nobody else. It's not true, but that's what people think. It's sad for them to think they know it all.

It's okay for us to think of ourselves as well as other people, also. I know I used to put people first instead of myself. When I found people taking advantage of my generosity, I quit putting them first all the time. It's somewhat selfish, but we are important as well.

I encourage you to keep on writing. Writing helps us to deal with things better than we would have otherwise. I look forward to hearing more of your family prose. When it comes to families, they sometimes think it's bad to put ourselves first before their needs and wants.

I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of piece of art  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I have read your monologue "Piece of Art" and will gladly give you a review. I am not a review professional, however, I can give feedback on how your monologue made me feel.

Love at first sight or glimpse is quite a remarkable thing. Your heart begins to flutter, your smile becomes bigger, your emotions become happier, and you feel like you're on top of the world. Yes, your loves, or loves can be like that. When you find yourself in love, you are certain that it's the real deal, only to find that your heart gets broken. Sometimes you get your answer about why it happened, and sometimes you don't. It's a tough call.

Don't give up on love. I added my version to a song "One Bad Apple". The words are as follows:

One bad apple don't spoil the whole bunch girl. My added version goes like this:

One bad apple don't spoil the whole bunch girl. You can have one bad apple, five bad apples, ten bad apples, fifty or more, but there's always one good apple.

Even though I can be devastated by heartbreak, my added version helps me to remember that all men are not bad. Whether it's a young boy, girl, man, or woman, there's always one good one out there who will love you for who you are.

I want to encourage you to keep on writing. I look forward to reading some more of your work.

I hope you will have blessings of good memories, friendships, good health, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this in their lives.

Keep believing in yourself. Keep smiling.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Truth Arrested  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I read your short story "Truth Arrested", and I will gladly give you a review. Even though I am not a review professional, I can give you feedback on how your short story left an impression on me.

What you said happens to be the truth. She was saying that her man doesn't take s*** off of her. You also said she couldn't be with a man who takes her s***.

Your story, at the end, went as follows:

After the separation of feelings, she thought, comes the rest of your life.

What the third line above says is that they don't take s*** off of anybody. It's a wonder how two people can exist together when they don't take each other's s***. It's hard to decide if it would be good or bad in a relationship. They may not believe anything that's said when they talk with each other.

I encourage you to keep on with your writing. It was interesting for me to read. I look forward to reading some more of your material.

I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to follow you during your lifetime. Everyone deserves this in their life.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Find A Yellow Car  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I have read your short story about family "Find A Yellow Car", and I will gladly do a review for you. I am not a review professional, however, I can give you feedback on how you short story made me feel.

It's easy to get caught up in things that we forget what's more important than working all the time. Society keeps us busy. When kids are involved, we need to take time to give attention to them. They grow up too fast. If we don't pay attention to them, we will miss out on the pleasures of growing up.

Your story was a joy to read. It made me want to participate in the game of who can find a yellow car first. You get points when you spot a yellow car first. It sounds like a lot of fun to play.

When I was a kid, I played the same game, only this one was with Volkswagens. Whenever you would see one, you would slap someone on the shoulder and say Slug Bug. I remember how much fun it was.

I encourage you to keep on with your writing. It made me smile when I read your story. Keep up the good work.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, friendships, good health, love, and happiness during your lifetime. Everyone is deserving of this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Bad Manners  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I have read your story "Bad Manners", and I will gladly do a review for you. Even though I am not a review professional, I can give you feedback on how your story made me feel.

Your story was all about people staring at you. An eerie feeling that is for sure. I can relate to what you said. A young woman came up to the counter where I was working and had a pierced ring in her nose. It was the first time I've seen someone like this. I tried not to stare, but, I couldn't help but stare a little bit. It looked freaky to me.

At the beginning of your story, you mentioned you had a gun. I am very proud of you for not having it with you. All the staring you kept getting from people. you could have easily taken it out and killed someone for doing just that, staring. It doesn't take much to set people off.

I encourage you to continue on with your writing. You have good writing skills. You expressed well what you went through in your body because of the stares you kept getting. I wonder what it was they kept staring at you for. It may have been nothing at all. But, then again, it might have been something on you, but, they were probably afraid to talk to you about it. Who knows? You can continue your story with a happy ending.

I hope you have blessings of joy, happiness, good health, good memories, relationships, and love. Everyone deserves to have this for their entire lifetime.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Youth  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good evening to you!

I reviewed your short story "Youth". I am not a review professional, however, I can do my best to give you feedback on how your short story has impacted me.

It's tough to get older. I am 67 years old. I find the years going faster and faster. I wasn't concerned about my age before, but, now I am a bit. It's not about my age so much; it's if I need to go in the hospital for some reason, I am afraid they won't let me back out. I was taught to take one day at a time. I've heard sayings like: "The Old Grey Mare Ain't What She Used To Be". Growing old has its aches and pains. It gets lonely when your family and friends have passed away. Especially, like me, I didn't have any children, so I wonder who would want to take care of me.

Remember that you are special and loved. Don't give up. Even though it may not seem like it, there are better tomorrows.

I encourage you to keep on writing. I look forward to reading more of your stories. It's good to share our memories with each other.

I hope you have blessings of good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last the rest of your life. Everyone is deserving of this. Keep smiling.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Good morning and hello to you!

I read your story "A Dream's Gotta Say Something", and I will give you a review. I am not a reviewing professional, however, feedback on how your story has impacted me is something I can do.

I enjoyed reading your story. Sometimes, it can be scary to have a bad dream. Dreams can say many things to you. When you awaken from a dream, it can seem like it's reality when it's not. Having to sleep with a gun by your side is scary enough since the gun could end up going off on you while you're sleeping. The results may not be a pretty one.

I don't care for guns myself. Too many crimes have been committed because the wrong people get a hold of them. Too many criminals take the lives of too many people. Innocent people often get killed also. It's senseless to carry guns. The guns are not the problem, it is the people behind them; who get too carried away. My dream would be to have a gun that wouldn't harm or kill people. This would be lovely.

For the right reasons, guns are okay. When I grew up, my dad had three guns. I didn't touch them because he explained what would happen if I were to play with them. I never questioned his reasoning for what he said; I just knew not to touch them. I was so glad about that.

I prefer that good dreams would occur in people's lives. They can put your creativity and imagination to work for the good. There wouldn't be any worries about dangerous things happening if we were all friendly.

I wish you well with your writing. I encourage you to write about the betterment of the lives of people.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this. I look forward to reading good stories from you.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello, and good morning to you!

I read your story "Too Young to Burn", and it's up for review. I am not a reviewing professional, however, I can give you feedback on how your story impacted me.

In your story, there's a lot of chaos going on. I think there are too many expectations put on young people these days. They make them grow up way too soon. Whatever happened to the days when kids could be kids and enjoy their youth? Kids need to have fun in their life; they shouldn't have to take on the responsibilities of an adult. When I grew up, we could stay up at night playing in our yards and were safe doing that. Neighbors looked after neighbors. We didn't have to worry about crime. Those were the days. There were no drive-by or school shootings where I grew up.

I want you to know that you are special. Life throws us in a loop. It's so confusing when we hear the news. We don't know the facts when hearing our politicians talk about issues. Everyone seems to want money. They care about themselves and not other people. The voice of politicians can be scary. When we tell the truth, we could be threatened with our lives. It isn't fair; we should be able to talk freely about things without harming others.

I grew up in a rural area. I didn't worry about things; I felt safe. One day a neighbor of ours murdered his wife. One young man, a teenager, was shot and nearly lost his life, while two other young teenagers got a bullet wound in the shoulder. I was seventeen years old when this happened in my life. It took a toll on me. I felt like I was robbed of my youthfulness. I didn't have to testify in court, thanks to my dad, but the man who did this threatened to go after anyone who was a witness to the crime. I suffered a lot through the years until I was fifty years old. I am now 67. I still suffer from this incident. With the help of medication and the faith I have in Jesus, I can go on with my life, but the memory of this incident still lingers on with me.

Don't give up. I have overcome a lot of obstacles in my life. I am grateful for this. I learned from the experiences I've gone through. I feel like I can help people get through their pain by sharing my struggles with them.

I encourage you to keep writing. Keep striving toward your dream. Do not think badly of yourself, think good thoughts. There is a saying that my first ex-husband said to me. It was: You Can. You Will. You Wait. You'll See.

Keep the above words to heart. I keep those words in my heart.

I hope you are blessed with good memories, good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, Hello, and good morning to you!

I have reviewed your draft "The Introduction to Caleb". I am not a reviewing professional however, I can give you feedback on how your draft has impacted me.

"The Introduction to Caleb". Caleb's character is interesting. It's not easy to find your voice, however, once it's found, things begin to shape up in your life. I'm curious to know what Caleb's voice will be. Will Caleb's character be good or bad? Will it be about a love relationship? Will he find one or will he be heartbroken? Will he be a singer? Will he be a detective trying to solve a mystery? or, Will his character be one of intrigue?

I look forward to learning more about his character by reading your story. I encourage you to keep writing. You are off to a good start. Keep up the good work.

I hope you will be blessed with good health, friendships, good memories, love, and happiness to last a lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this. Lots of luck writing your story.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Review of Transformation!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello, and good afternoon to you!

I am reviewing "Transformation!" for you. I am not a professional reviewer, however, I can give you feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

Your poem was short but said a lot. Your words were expressed well. I am impressed. Sometimes the shortest things we write take a while to figure out. There is a lot of meaning to your words. I'm guessing you pondered on this one for some time. I can relate to what you wrote. I am thinking of self-publishing some books. I am not familiar with what it takes when I have them ready to sell, but, in the end, it's the pen that keeps on working for me since it's my passion to be a writer.

I encourage you to keep writing. It made me feel good to read your poetry.

I hope you will be blessed with good health, friendships, good memories, love, and happiness. Everyone is deserving of this.


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I read your story "Folded Red White and Blue" and am thrilled to give you a review as requested.

As an eight-year-old boy, your teacher instructed you to burn the American flag because it touched the ground. You did as you were told. It's very admirable of you not to call your teacher a jackass as your sergeant instructed you to do. Sending the flag back to the sergeant was a nice gesture on your part. He told you to dust off the American Flag and fly it with pride. I'm sure he appreciates getting the flag to put into his pocket. You should be proud to be an American. Even though things are chaotic these days, and the military is put down for what they do, don't let that dissuade you from being an officer. They are there to protect us. I don't care for war but grateful for what they do. I don't like to see lives lost, even the innocent ones, because of war. I am optimistic that we will have peace in our world once again.

My nephew retired from the Army in February of this year, 2024. He was grateful for deciding to serve in the Army; it helped me become a better person because of it. He was the director of the band in the Army. I am proud of his accomplishments. He is now the General Manager of a theatre in Kentucky. He is happy about that. Alex Miller, who sang in American Idol, will be one of the performers when it opens up. This is exciting!

Thank You for the honor of reviewing your story. I enjoyed reading it. Reviewing more of your stories in the future would be great!

I hope you have good health, friendships, thoughts, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Hello, and good morning to you!

I read your story "To the Moon and Back, Chapter 1", and am reviewing it for you. I am not a professional reviewer, however, I can give you feedback on how your story impacted me.

I found your story interesting. Taking off from Earth to go to a new planet "Gliese 667Cc" sounds like an exciting adventure. It would be terrifying to me since I am afraid of heights and traveling at fast speeds. Being high up in space to see the magnificent views of our universe and beyond is a marvel. Being confined close together in small quarters would be claustrophobic. Don't get me wrong. I love to look at pictures of space, but the thought of being so high up in the sky would drive me bonkers.

When arriving at their destination, it was thrilling for the daughter at first, but then, the novelty of it seemed to be fading. According to their dad, this would be their new home if everything checked out to be safe, such as clean air, water, etc. The dad wanted his kids to bring back samples, and, if anything were to go wrong, be there for them. Being on a new planet would seem boring to me; it would seem lonely.

I encourage you to keep writing. Your story kept me intrigued. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

I hope you are blessed with good thoughts, excellent health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Hello, and good morning to you!

I reviewed short story "Addict". I am not a professional reviewer; however, I can give you feedback on how your short story impacted me.

Your story touched me. It's easy to fall into an addiction of laziness. It doesn't have to be because of alcohol or drugs. There is another name for it: Loneliness. I have been through this battle have been through two marriages and divorced both of them because of verbal abuse. My second husband had addictions of smoking, alcohol, and drugs. He ended up losing his life because of those addictions. He smoked in the house. I had to breathe in the smoke. My health was affected as a result. I was so stiff I could hardly move. There was a chiropractor who was able to get me back into shape.

I want you to know you're special. Don't give up. I admire the courage it took you to share your story. There are many people who feel the way you do, but it's due mostly to alcohol and drugs. I encourage you to keep writing. Take time out to read a good book; this will take you to a better place for a while. It's a means of escape. It's okay to give yourself a hug. Look yourself in the mirror and tell yourself how beautiful you are. Don't let a bad day get you down. Don't let it ruin the talent you have.

I hope my review is helpful to you. I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.

I am looking forward to reading more of your stories.


Anna Marie Carlson
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Hello, and good morning to you!

I reviewed your short story "The Love of Nature". I am not a professional reviewer, however, I can give you feedback on how your story impacted me.

Your dream of nature is spectacular! You describe the ideal scene for someone to dream about. You have written your story well. I love the sound of birds tweeting, butterflies flying gently by, seeing a bright blue beautiful sky, beautiful green grass, the morning sun greeting me with a kiss, and the smell of roses and other pretty flowers. Smelling the fresh air around us would be the best to go out in.

The last part of your story reads as follows:

Suddenly waking up, she realized it had all been a dream! She looked out her window, expecting to see the blue sky and the green grass. But all she saw was a grey sky, with columns of smoke rising into it, and a city where all the houses were crammed together. And there was not a single green in it! It was so irritating. "Oh, when will any of my dreams come true?" she sighed.

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It's rough waking up from a dream and seeing smoke all around you with houses all crammed all around you. I can feel the emotions behind this one. Yes, it would be irritating to see.

Life is what it is. It is too bad dreams don't come true soon enough. Cling to your dreams and remember how great it was. Remember, dreams can come true. First of all, have faith that it can happen. Even if it is for a moment, bask in that memory for a fulfilling and wonderful day.

I encourage you to keep writing. I enjoyed your story. One thing about fiction, we can go back reminiscing about a time that's a reality in your dreams. It's a nice way of escaping the drudgery of a gloomy day.

I hope you have blessings of good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


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Hello, and Good evening to you!

I reviewed your short story "My Secret Hideout". I am not a professional reviewer, however, I can give you feedback on how your short story impacted me.

Your short story had a lot of Umph to it. When a neighbor had a vicious dog that tried to attack a child, I would've been upset. It was nice that she noticed that a dog was tied in the yard to a chain. She offered to help the lady take care of the dog. It wouldn't cost her any money. Your short story was clear to me. I enjoyed reading it.

I encourage you to keep up with your writing. I look forward to reading more of your stories in the future. You used your words carefully. Neighbors should be helping other neighbors out.

I hope my review was helpful to you. I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness throughout your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this in their lives.


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Hello, and Good morning to you!

I am reviewing your poem "Paint the Pain Away". I am not a professional reviewer, however, I can give you feedback on how your poem has impacted me.

Your poem reads as follows:

If light can fill the dark, then why can't I paint the pain away?

Blazing.

Burning.

Broken.

Twisted flames of dancing colors.

Winding bright tendrils of black.

Clawing and reaching, yet never grasping.

The sky folds from blue to nothing.

Yet here I stand and stare,

Reaching into the unknowns for something that will never exist in my mind's eye,

Or the minds of they.

They! Oh they who gape with clouded souls and scorching tongues!

Screeching out the pain of today and the blood of tomorrow.

As the moon cries and the sun fades,

Here we lie in the fullness of emptiness.

With nails that bite and teeth that scratch,

Their eyes are open,

But they can no longer see.

Left behind are hearts that can only bleed.

But if one can simply brush over the brokenness of day,

Why can't I paint the pain away?

In your poem, you expressed a lot of pain. You painted the picture of pain well. The emotion behind it was real. I could feel it. Pain can make you feel like it won't go away. Medications can help some, but not completely. It would be nice if we could paint the pain away. With each brush stroke, the colors would brighten up a day. It would be great if this could be done.

I encourage you to keep writing. I look forward to reading more of your poetry.

I hope you are blessed with good health, friendships, love, and happiness to last your lifetime. Everyone deserves to have this.


Anna Marie Carlson
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