I related so much with this. Your words have an ache to them which makes the poem very easy to connect to. Feels autobiographical but I may be wrong. The imagery is striking and abundant in loneliness, making your story very graphic and potent. My favorite line is : "Although without a hello can you have a goodbye."
I am not a romantic and hence never try to write on that particular subject but reading your poem makes me want to take a chance. Your words have a serene effect and a sort of prophetic tone which establishes from the very first line a hint that no matter how bad things are going to get for this couple, it's going to end perfectly for them. I like the faith you have and it feels sort of autobiographical. Few words, but they tell the story well.
I was drawn to your poem because I'm a huge fan of Dicken's work, especially Great Expectations. It's always interesting to read different perspectives of the old story. Especially from the point of view of a character who really didn't get to say everything her background tale burdened her with. This was a fascinating read. Although the setting is familiar, I like your creative touch.
Fantastic piece!! I enjoyed it thoroughly! Especially the line "I wonder as I listen to the year's birth song."- the last stanza is a perfect ending and all your musings are so very true! Daring to do things differently.
Despite the words that war so engagingly, bringing out the idea in a lucid fashion, it's a poem that didn't get lost in its mammoth theme. Enjoyed every single line.
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