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Review by Alyce Mitchell Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I'm hooked- where's the rest of it? As a reader I want to know LOTS more. As a writer I think this is well crafted and engaging. You have drawn on some very deep emotions that a large portion of the readers of this type of fiction can relate to. Nora is a character readers are going to want to stand beside while she figures all of this out. I found it refreshing to make her an editor rather than a PI. There is a new twist on an old premise and I am very interested to see how you pull this off. Good luck and I'll be adding you to my list of authors to watch out for.Hope to see the rest soon!
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Review by Alyce Mitchell Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
I like the basic idea you have here. There is a lot of potential in what I have read so far. However I did have to back up and re-read a number of sections because I got lost. I was following the thoughts of Balthazar and the crystals and what they meant to him and the rest of the vamps then you transitioned to Sarah and Madison and their tangled relationship. Then Nicky is part of the equation. Then Alex. I guess I just got overwhelmed by too much too soon.
Maybe if you broke this chapter apart it would be easier to take in.

This is just my opinion as both a reader and a writer. Good luck!
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Review by Alyce Mitchell Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
this is excellent. You have me on the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter. I can't wait to read the rest of the story. The only thing I find a bit confusing is how you are using so many POV. Part of it is first person from Brendan, part is first person from Gwen and then there are paragraphs where it is omnipotent. IMHO I think this story lends itself to the omnipotent POV rather than any character in the first person. Keep up the great work!!!
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