Very interesting piece. It sends me a appealing vibe, one that I cannot quite explain, maybe because the rhythm is quite disturbing to me, but in a good way. I especially like the verses "The ground thrums [...] another's savior ". Makes me think about war somehow hehe...
Anyway, good work. Keep writing!
Nice piece ! I particularly enjoy the line with the E-minor chord, so true. I don't have any advice to help you to improve your work, and besides I think that it is something quite personal so trying to alter it would sort of make it less authentic. Anyway, this one is good!
keep writing !!
and may the fork be with you!
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