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Review of (Roleplay) Ugar  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi BSmith!

I enjoyed this story but there were a few issues problems with it. Like when you said, “Udgar was only seven,when was out up for adoption” I think you meant, “ when HE was PUT up for adoption.” There were a few other mistakes like this in your story, but overall your story was pretty good.

-Alpha Wolf
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