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#4718620

Review of The best parts of my childhood

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Rated: E

| (2.0)

It's interesting how many of these childhood memories are centered around animals, makes me think of Aesop's fables. It's good to be special.

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#4718619

Review of Gloomy birthday

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Rated: E

| (2.0)

The subject matter here naturally deflects criticism. "It's just became day I rather skip"

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#4718532

Review of Reading and Coloring

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

I like this idea, but must confess as an old man I immediately thought of what might happen when a kid tried to emulate Tommy the turtle or Danny the Dolphin and their own story didn't work out the same way. A lot of the teaching of lessons is the result of how an idea, like a positive moral precept (i.e. kindness, honesty etc...), intersects with the learners experience in the world. Pro-social virtues are great, but often less apparently so in a context where individualistic values like drive, self-sufficiency and achievement are baked into the experience, academic/educational contexts for example. Thanks, gave me something to overthink about, always a plus.

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#4718529

Review of Serpent lies...

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Rated: E

| (2.0)

"bowels constructed", This is the bit where I fully lost track of the symbolism/imagery. The ending seems to land at a conclusive "we return to where we come from" but then pick back up again with "onward we go", kind of jarring. Thanks

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#4718520

Review of Hinky and the "Drain"

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Rated: E

| (4.0)

I've walked through so many flocks of Canada Geese, I can confirm this is certainly in keeping with their byzantine politics (fowlitics?). Very clever.

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#4718519

Review of I’m Odds and Ends

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Rated: E

| (2.5)

Seems like a trap which has yet to spring. Kinda seems padded with brittishisms as well. Specifying "Cornish" pasties, Tab, and she's gotta be having a "cuppa" kinda seem like cliches, but maybe it's just my American eyes. I wouldn't specify Salen's hotdogs, Pepsi and a mug o' joe. All around good though, caught my attention.

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#4718514

Review of Pomegranate

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Rated: E

| (3.0)

I had to google "moth ray", I would hesitate to AI produce an image of "blood, veil, moth rays", jeepers-creepers.

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#4718511

Review of blooming dreams

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Rated: E

| (3.5)

"The past,
a story well-told,
leaves no trace." I like this bit a lot. This lotus symbolism, for some reason, leads me to start trying to compound or hyphenate word pairs (i.e. lotus-sprouts, shiningbright, chilling-plight etc...). 'Think the "persons" in the subject line/synopsis is meant to be possessive.
Good work.