Every woman's nightmare! I liked the way you described the events leading up to the officer scaring the life out of her. The story moved forward very well without seeming like a play by play. For a minute, I was so caught up in the fear that once she settled down, I thought you were going to build us up with another fright by making him the bad guy. It was a relief that he was truly a good guy!
Nice work. I really enjoyed the way you used the imagery of the mud and the character trying to clean himself off as a way to describe his guilt for committing an immoral act. And his family and neighbors wanting him not to "track the mud" on all the things they each held pure. The description of the Tsunami at the end was a nice end to demonstrate the devastation his act caused.
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