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Rated: E | (3.5)
Right away in the first line, the rhythm is disturbed by your usage of amidst/misty. I appreciate what you're try to create but I just don't think the words work well together.

You've clearly got the poetry part of this down--but I wish that you would include more of the story between these people.

Write on!
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