Even if you aren't fully satisfied with it, this is a wonderful poem so far. The grammar is sound. The use of alliteration and consonance in this poem are excellent and captivating. I can feel the river and the falls as I read the poem, each syllable hinting at the crashing and tumbling of the water. Your poem put me right there. I feel almost as if I had hiked along it with you. It's a beautifully done poem. It was like a miniature vacation for me, so thank you for it. I can't stop reading it. I myself don't always like to receive compliments before I am fully finished with a project, but I couldn't keep from reviewing this piece. Excellent job.
As someone who has not been able to successfully create a haiku poem yet, I'm very impressed. Haiku is a very difficult form to produce well for many poets, and I want to congratulate you for successfully creating one. I am also fond of the message of this poem. As I read it, the syllables sound right to me, and it all flows well. Great job.
There is much in this poem I can personally relate to, and in fact a few of the columns I published with my local newspaper touched on the subject of this poem. I enjoyed reading it. The structure is clean and well done, as is the rhyme scheme. There are a few grammatical mistakes within it that somewhat take away from the poem as a whole, distracting from the poem's beauty and message. Just focusing on subject matter and rhyme scheme, I would give this poem five stars without a doubt. Taking into consideration the grammatical errors, I have to give it 3.5 stars, as they truly disrupted the poem's flow, for me.
The first mistake was in the very first line. Now, this could be your personal style, as I have found other poems with the same "mistake" in printed books, however, to me, it read like a mistake. You wrote "Do you know what is like..." when it seems that you should have written "Do you know what it is like..."
This is just one mistake, and there are several more further on, some to do with punctuation. I can give you more information in a personal e-mail, if you'd like. Just let me know. If you read through it again yourself, you may be able to find them.
All in all, however, I did like this poem a lot and I think you did well with it. Those grammatical errors I found are the only things holding this poem back from being as great as it could be, and they may be intentional to suit a certain style you desire, as I have seen such styles before.
This poem had me hanging on every word and laughing through it all, sometimes with delight and sometimes with bitter understanding. I believe that most writers can relate to this poem, as ideas (and the lack of) captivate, exasperate, and baffle us all. I myself get my best ideas at night, often when I have nothing available to write them down *laughs bitterly*. Aside from the subject, the rhyme pattern was consistent. The poem itself was constructed very nicely, and the lines flowed effortlessly. I myself couldn't stop until I was finished reading the whole poem, and that is exactly what a writer should strive for. The only mistake I noticed was so small that I don't even want to mention it, as it might just be on my own screen, but there seems to be a space missing between "Listen to me!" and "Let me out!" I hate nit-picking and I don't mean to annoy you, but that is the only mistake I myself found and in order to give an honest review, I felt the need to mention it, as I would appreciate the same feedback to my own work in order to make it better. All in all, I can't give this poem any less than five stars.
I love the rhyme scheme and imagery of this poem, as well as the Native American undertones. It's clear-cut and well written. Also, I noticed in the title you cleverly manipulated the word to simulate a wolf's howl, which is fitting and innovative. This poem vividly portrays the bittersweet end of a long and full life as well as the beginning of a new one on another plane. The only thing I would have changed if it were mine is in the last stanza, I would have put a comma after "home," to better indicate a pause before moving on to the next line, for the sake of balance. However, it's unnecessary in this poem, as the pause is already implied by the preceding stanzas. Well done, thank you for the great read!
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