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Review of Crimson Waters  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A wonderfully-crafted tale. Although, to be honest, I did not find anything new in your story's cocept, however the presentation has made all the difference - very nice, it is. No grammatical errors notices, however, I suggest you to use line spacing in the peice at appropriate place. Like for instance, after a dailogue or completion of a setence, leave a line and the start the next sentence.

Good work!

Good Luck!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of What I Ask?  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (2.5)
Well, with all honesty and no hard feelings, I have to say that I didnt find the poem to be as intriguing as much as I thought it would be. It appears to be like the othe same mundane and routine less emotive love poems where pain is the main protagnist. I wish I could have given you credit for the intepretation, but that too appears below par.

You have the potiential, but certainly this peice doesnt highlight it.

Good Luck!

Thanks for posting!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of Can I...Smile?  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Good work!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of Hate  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I was just reminded of my philosophy texts. I dont think I have read such a clean and neat translation of hatred and similar emotions in a poetic language for quite some time! I have congatulate you for achieving such a remark!*Smile*

Good work!

Good Luck!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of The Gates  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Lovely peice of work. Poetry is an intricate job - both for the writer and the reviewer. As a writer you have certainly excelled, no doubt. Your choice of topic is nothing exception, your interpretion however, has taken the poem to a new level. Well done!
Language is fine. I immensely liked the line:
"While in the East they kill for Gods, all different, yet the same;" - A master's stroke!

I am sure the 4.0 is causing you worry. Well the rating doesnt mean you have any loose ends in your work. My ways of reviewing are that the writer should never feel his work is perfect. The 1 less rating is my way of motivating and encouraging you to keep writing!

So enjoy what you write and thanks for posting in my forum.

Good Luck!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of The Quiet Hero  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
A very nice and humble effort! I noted no errors of grammatical mistakes. I suggest however, you could develop this into a long version - as a story, perhaps. You could possibly portray the old man's sorrow and pain in a detailed way through the story. Your writing abilities are good. I love the end of the peice, well-thought!

Thanks for posting in!

Good Luck!

N@ughty Princess
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Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
You have the creativity of a poet in you. You have chosen and interesting topic for a poem, but, m friend, your thoughts and lines have gone for toss. The beginning of the peice is fine, but as the reader moves along, confusion dawns, and begins to wonder: what are trying to get to?
You seem to be losing the grip over your poem.
No doubt, you have a good baggage of words, but you havent channelised them well enough.

Good Luck!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of Reunited Lovers  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very well- written. I llove how you have used the first line " Satin laces and silent kisses" - how very mushy and exotic. The poem flows in almost like some lyrical melody and every line begs for deserving attention. You make a wonderful writer, my friend!

Good Luck!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of Rainbow  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Well, real life experiences are the most difficult ones to pen down and I am glad you were able to do so, successfully!

I enjoyed the positivity surrounding your words, a tinge of pain is everywhere, but its wonderful how you have expressed your emotions!

Take care and Good Luck!

Thanks for posting in!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of the Yellow Chair  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Different. Exceptional. Well, those two words are what exactly flashed in my mind after I finished a good read of your peice. You have been blessed with a writer's hand. Utilize it. You have the potential.

Good Luck!

N@ughty Princess
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Review of Compelled to beg  Open in new Window.
Review by Naughty Princess Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Plus points first:
1) You have an excellent command over the language, your wordage is excellent.

Minuses:
1) I have read many peices on this site, however, none like yours. I fail to comprehend what issue are you trying to reach out with.

2) Perhaps a little more detailing is required.

Take care!

NP
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