Hey Maldakir! I found your story through Noticing Newbies: Safer Writing newsletter. I liked your story, there were some spelling and grammatical mistakes but i like how you describe the chosen ones feelings of his own kind. Also, i like the way you moved your plot. I did however, half way through got a bit tired of reading the long descriptions of his pain. I wanted to know further more about him.
And here: I will myself to focus on understanding the meaning of the whispered words.
you can instead say "I became determined to understand the meaning of the soft, faint words.
Basically, good idea! I know i couldn't have come up with it! Write on! xD
I enjoyed reading your short story KawaiiBoo! The beginning could be a bit more clear. I lost myself over there but as i continued reading it all began to make sense. :D
Nice story! Write on!
Hi Jen! I love this poem. I can feel the emotions and actually feel bad for the baby boy while growing the emotion of resentment for the parents who abandoned him.
Love what you have written!! It really isn't fair that people judge your writing and in fear of that "judgement" , you stat writing stories or things that people would like to read.A writer/author is an artist, a person whose imagination runs wild but instead of a drawing we paint the words down on paper. Thats the beauty of us writers so thank you Kody Cross for pointing that out!! ;)
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