I really like the imagery used with your last line in the poem. I feel like it's relatable and the rhymes you used went together nicely. Keep writing poems, I found this very interesting.
Oh. My. Gosh. The start to this story is so captivating! I would love to read more of what is to happen. Your main character in this piece seems like a woman fit to be queen. She seems to hold a certain power, calmness, and the right kind of love for the prince. However I would like to know if she ever had doubt she would be chosen or if there were any other people interested in her before. I feel like that would make an awesome conflict. I apologise if you already thought of this. Anyway, this is the best piece I've read so far. Keep on writing!
I love the ominous dark feeling this poem gives off. The way you wrote the poem gave me slight goosebumps to read and really portrayed the right picture. It might just be me but one thing I would like to have an elaboration on is who's laughing in your last line.
I love the start of this story. As I read I became more and more drawn in. I can't wait to find out what was up with Kelsey's parents. It would be great to see more of Kelseys reactions to the trash talk to get a sense of just how it's throwing her off. That said, keep writing, I love your work!
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