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7 Total Reviews Given
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I will read into your story and make you aware of things I believe would serve you well change. I will tell you whether the story seems interesting or not, but more so I will tell you of how you can present your story better. I will make you aware of typos, grammatical errors, or sentences that might sound nicer restructured. I won't make the review too long; however, if you request a review from me and decide I have not given an adequate review, email me back and I will probably reply to any of your questions.
Favorite Genres
Fantasy, Romance, Sci-Fi, Dystopian, Historical Fiction, War Stories, Tragedies, Poetry, Philosophical, Comedy.
Least Favorite Genres
Erotica, Essays, "Politically-Correct".
I will not review...
Overly sexual stories; exceptionally childish stories (comedy is fine); stories written to be anti-Christian.
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Review by Aldrich Smith Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Is this story from personal experience?
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Review of The last Story  Open in new Window.
Review by Aldrich Smith Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
An interesting start. I can't tell though. Are you speaking of yourself, or of your character?
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Review by Aldrich Smith Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi! I would like to join, but the Discord invite is "invalid".
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Review by Aldrich Smith Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is wonderful. Truth be told, there is hardly anything worth criticizing. It's not the nonpareil of beginnings, relatively quiet and uninteresting as it is–nonetheless it heftily deserves a five-star. Here are my few pointers: (Mind that I myself are completely guilty of such things in my own writing—I'm just a bit of an attentive reader)
Overuse of the pronoun "she" in some parts

In a distinct place, there is a sort of unenjoyable rhythm of "She did this. She did this afterwards. Then she did this." (I hope that makes sense)
It may serve you well to give us a little more of a taste of her personality, to intrigue the reader, if you will. If her personality is just meant to be the "kind-woman down the street", ignore this.

It might not be the best idea to end with that little hint of impending terror. I've grown to love it when it is a surprise if poor own, rather than hinted at us prior.

There might be one or two grammatical errors

Don't take these critisizations as distaste. This is great. Thank you for writing it, I'll be happy to read more. I'm just trying to help you make it even better than it is. 😁


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Review of Handiwork  Open in new Window.
Review by Aldrich Smith Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I very much like this poem. There is a sort of peacefulness to the words, and that seems to be intentional.
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