It reminded me of Pride and Prejudice (which I love), and you included beautiful imagery. The biggest plus to this piece really is the description and the imagery that you used. There are a couple of typos, some awkward wording-- when a word didn't quite fit in the sentence as you meant it-- and then one instance where you pasted the same paragraph twice (in the last chapter I believe). But the description was really quite good in spite of any of that, which is mechanical anyway. Yes, the only thing that seemed in error was the fact that a couple of times the adverb or verb didn't quite fit, and that's not that big of a deal, especially not to me who envies the way you creatively described sensations and sights. :)
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