Nice piece. I really liked it. The idea of young guys getting detained for prank is hilarious. Especially for the circumstance that you put them into. I think that this was a great piece to enter into a contest and it is also great considering the restrictions of the contest. Good job.
Excellent piece. I really enjoyed reading this and can't help but somehow relate to this. But this writing is so much better than what I would write. The detail was fantastic and the flow kept me hooked. And the voice was really clear to me as I read it as well. I hope that I can read more soon.
This was a great piece. I liked how you were able to give the full experience of it without dragging out the details too badly. The imagery was good and everything was perfectly in order. One thing that I would suggest is maybe adding more facial imagery. Besides that it was perfect.
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