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Rated: E | (4.5)
I greatly enjoyed your work. I love the visual descriptions and the effort you put into creating a world for the reader,but not with too many words. I would have liked a action sequence in the first few sentences to grab my attention and then slowly build up to the end. I also would have liked to see as much time spent on the descriptions of the sister and mother as was spent on the father and dragon. it seems a bit unbalanced. Otherwise I found it thrilling and I absolutely love the ending. I would not change a thing there. keep up the wonderful writing.
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