a nice short poem. my observation are few. firstly, i think you mean 'yearning' not 'yearing' . for a lover sitting on 'the golden sun' is a herculean task even though i know it is a figure of speech but i don't think it fit in here. because to my understanding of the poem the lovers are in a very good time - a sweet affair, why then should he or she burden himself to sit on the hot hot sun waiting for the lover. i will suggest you use phrases that fitly reflects this sweet love
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