I was drawn into this story. You did a great job creating suspense and mystery. Your descriptions of the feelings kept me wondering what was going to happen next. Sometimes the writing was a bit choppy which interrupted the flow of the story and caused me to have to go back and reread. It also seemed like some of the descriptions of place and time were inconsistent which left me confused as to the time of day and exactly where the characters were. I enjoyed the twist at the end!
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