I've very much enjoyed reading this so far and i very much hope to read some more very soon. it's a lot different from some of the other stuff i've read before. with out it switching back and forht helps a lot. you're a very good writer. keep it up. It's very much worth reading..
so in this one i got that idea that greg was in love with bob or atleast lusting for him. the question is why were they both married twice but yet greg could be gay? was it a new developemnt or was it from watching all those guys in the showers at bootcamp?
I like the way your described fat boys almost heart attach and how everyone freaked out, most people really do freak out like that. the way you drescribe one tall one short, reminds me kind of some cat in the hat books That's very interesting to find out that the guy they were pussing is really the guy pussing them.
very intresting, words were a little big but after reading it more i kind of understood it. i'd like to know what happened in the past to end them in bootcamp the first time but i guess that is soon to come. i was a little confused with the switching from court room to bootcamp but i guess when i read on i'll understand more. good work
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