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Review of To My Dearest  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This is a good story. I felt the frustration of the writer as he walk talking to himself.

I am a little confused how he has gone to bed without writing the love letter, but she writes something below the "love letter" When did he write it?
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
The story was pretty well written. I felt I had a feeling how it would end. Something in the text gave it away for me.

When you wrote "Next time please advise me before you alter the parameters." as a response from the leader, I felt this sounded a little too stiff and formal. Unless that is part of the character of the leader that you wish to portray.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I enjoyed reading the tale of Buster and Paddy. I found myself wanting to read more of the details and would like and expanded story or continuation of their adventures. Has the potential for a nice series with conflict between the Buster and Paddy and them not being understood by their masters.
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