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Rated: E | (4.5)
I thought this was such a wonderful piece! I could feel the emotion and that is what I love about poetry. It was a pretty easy read and I don't know if a word change of two might add to that aspect.

She took the shrunken cold hand,
kissed it with warm honeyed lips.
His new bride whispered,
"Darling, it's lovely and warm on the other side."

I loved that part and I think it would read better without the lovely and, just it's warm on the other side, refering to his cold hands.

Too sweet! I really liked this! Write on, please!
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