Powerful message is assured!!! Great usage of words and no mistakes with grammar, i did not see any punctuation errors either. I felt amazing whilst reading this, you know a way with words, a great way!!! You are a great writer and its been an honor to come across your work.
LOVE THIS STORY, it had me really hooked! bit of overuse of commas, but nothing too that cant be fixed,
couldn't see any spelling mistakes, nor grammar errors.
love all details very very much, your a really good writer and have a lot of potential, i'd love a more extended version in the future.
My Opinions: I love your writing language, its beautiful!!! The characters are good! Lovely plot! Great punctuation!
Suggestions: the comma between 'last snow' and 'on the ground' is unnecessary. "trees fall all the time thought deer..." would be better with some sort or quotation, either ' or ".
Final thoughts: great story!! Keep up the good work
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