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I haven't truly read this yet, but briefly looking at it, it's hard to read.
There's no spacing between paragraphs. I suggest adding it because you wrote so much it's all clumping together and then starts blur into one long word. Or a blackhole, depending on how you look at it.
I don't know what a "wyrms" is, but he sounds cute.
Snatching magpies out of the sky - now this is getting interesting.
Please fix the paragraph spacing so it'll be easier for me to read... pretty please.