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Re-reading your poem Freedom is a tricky thing, I think I spotted a mechanical problem -
But things can run amiss as time
moves on and countries age - should it be countries plural?
perhaps instead =
But things can run amiss in time
As we and country age

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Thank you, Lilli! Very sweet of you...
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